Journal Entry #13

Revised Thesis: Testing for the ACTN3 gene is detrimental to children because it can be misused by parents. It will not lead to success in spots because children will be pressured to play sports they do not enjoy and ultimately quit.

Conclusion from paper: problem =wordiness

The genetic tests being promoted by the Atlas Sports Gene company is detrimental to children because they will be pigeonholed into a limited amount of sports and have increased pressure. For children, sports are supposed to be something they enjoy doing that is a fun way to keep them healthy. It is also based on a study with a limited sample population and many researchers believe that predicting future athletic talent is not just black and white. The test will not lead to success in sports because children will be worn down by playing sports they don't like at a competitive level and eventually quit. The test will be misused by parents who go overboard just wanting the best for their child.

Revised Conclusion:

Genetic Sport Testing being promoted by Atlas will ultimately lead to children being pigeon-holed into a limited amount of sports. The test is detrimental to youth in sports because of parent misuse. Although the test has intentions of increasing success in sports, it will actually do the opposite. Children might have more natural ability in the sports they participate in, but without enjoying the sport, they are more likely to quit in the future.

Journal Entry #12

Thesis statement: Testing for the ACTN3 gene is detrimental to children and will not lead to future success in sports.

Journal Entry #11

Many people may argue that inmates are not in the best health and so they should not be tested on. The majority of inmates on death row are older men. However, even elderly men have to same genetic make-up as women or children. Their body functions the same way as other humans and this would be much more accurate than animal testing. Also, men in prison are able to communicate the side effects of the tests. Humans, unlike animals, are able to tell researchers how they are feeling. Animals are not able to tell researchers that they are aching allover, or they have a stomach ache, which leaves the animal testing more inaccurate (Animal Drug Tests).

(Revised Version)

Some people believe that the health status of inmates is a problem. The majority of inmates on death row are older men who rarely get exercise. However, elderly men have the same genetic make-up as women and children. Their body functions the same way so lab tests would be more accurate. Inmates would also be able to communicate the side effects of the tests to the researcher. Unlike animals, they would be able to tell the researcher how they are feeling. Animals are not able to tell the researcher that their legs itch, or that their body aches all over. The health status of inmates is not a problem to testing cosmetic problems on inmates ("Animal Drug Tests" 2).

Journal Entry #10

In "A modest Proposal" Swift proposes that in order to help the starving people of Ireland, they should eat their own children. He says that the poor people should eat their children because they are being a burden to society. He structures his piece by setting up a scene to get the reader's attention. He shows a woman dressed in rags that has children following her down the street. He then gives his proposal that we should eat these poor children after they are one year old. After he states his solution, he gives his arguments as to why this would be effective to the country of Ireland. Before he concludes the piece, he states his 6 arguments or supporting evidence again and then give the piece closure. His supporting evidence is that these children are being a burden to society and therefore should be eaten. In turn, they would now help society. This would also prevent voluntary abortions and women killing their children because they can't be fed. This satire piece is effective because it sheds light on the situation that was going on in Ireland during this time which people seemed to be ignoring. It is also effective because it proposal is so absurd that the reader becomes very interested in the topic. He used words like boil and bake to describe cooking the children, which today we use only for animals. Swift uses a lot of reasoning in his proposal. In many cases he goes through in depth measures to explain why his solution is efficient. He uses math and research to prove his point by estimating the number of children born each year and when their would be an abundance of children. He even calculates how many pounds a child is when they have been fed for a year and how many families that it would be able to feed. The babies could also be used as gloves and boots for women. This satire is meant to mock the govt. because they were not doing anything to help the country of Ireland during this famine. I think this is different than the other pieces we have read so far because the proposal is so absurd. I like this piece because I was not bored when I was reading it and it served its purpose to shed light on the famine in Ireland.

Topic: Animal Testing

Why? i want to find out the negative aspects of it

In order to.. show my reader that there is a better solution to testing products on animals

1. How many animals are tested on each year?

2. How many animals are injured each year as a result to testing?

3. What is the cost to house and feed these animals?

4. How many companies use animal testing

5. What is the accuracy of animal testing?

Questions for solution

6. How long, on average are people on death row?

7.How much does it cost to keep people alive on death row?

8. Is there enough people to test these products on?

Journal Entry #9

http://dailyitem.com/0100_news/x1498156952/Keller-Let-s-shrink-House

This is an article that I found in my home-town newspaper. The speaker of the State House is looking for sponsors that would be in favor of his proposal of cutting back the size of PAs legislature. Many people had different views on the bill. In my opinion, I don't think they should cut back the number of PA representatives so severely. The proposal is to cut back 50 people, which is a large number. This would cause many people to lose their jobs. Also, Pennsylvania is a very diverse state. We have people to represent from very different backgrounds. It is good that we have so many representatives because I am sure people from my small community have different opinions than people from Philly or Pittsburgh.

http://www.standard-journal.com/articles/2011/03/19/news/doc4d82067439032918424489.txt

This article is about the debate over higher education. Tim Corbett suggested that the money be lent to students in the form of grants instead of subsidies. It is the biggest cut of higher education than any governor has proposed this year. I have two different opinions on this article. I know that because of our economic situation money has to be cut from somewhere so cutting it from higher education is seemingly a good proposal. However we need people to go to college so that they can have jobs in the future. With these cuts to education some people will be forced to not go to a regular 4 year college and our economy will suffer in the future. Secondly, schools need subsidies and their institutions benefit the public by research money.

http://www.usnews.com/science/articles/2010/01/14/technology-aims-to-replace-animal-testing

This article is about how Hurel Corp. developed technology that would switch from animal testing to testing done with stem cells of the human body. They did this research with the help of funding from the L'Oreal cosmetic company. The tests done show that this will hopefully be in place next year, but rigorous tests have not been completed yet. This is obviously a controversial topic because stem cell research is a controversial topic. In my opinion, I would rather see testing done on the stem cells than to animals because the animals are already living. Also, in the future it will probably be more accurate to test on human stem cells than animal cells because we do not have to same genome as animals such as mice or guinea pigs. This product would also cut the cost of developing a new drug by 1 million dollars!

journal Entry #8

The two bottles serve a similar purpose but are unique in their shape and grip. The Snapple bottle is firm and rigid. Its structure is a rounded shape with no sharp edges. There is no structure built into the bottle for you to grip it. On the other hand, the plastic bottle gives when you squeeze it. It can make you feel powerful holding something so easily deformed in your hand. The color has a pale blue tint, created this way so that the water inside looks more appetizing than regular water. The structure has a unique shape and has a place to make it fit seemingly perfect in your hands. The Snapple bottle has a unique design on the top but otherwise has no ridges. However, the plastic water bottle is full of ridges creating a fun and unique design on the bottle. Both bottles can be detrimental to our planet without the correct recycling. The Snapple bottle is more pleasing to the eye with its creative design and calm, refreshing color. The water bottle is plain and simple without a logo to specify which brand of water that it is. It could be any of the various brands but I think that this shape indicates that it is Aquafina. The shape of the bottle is unique to that brand.